Please critique this story opening?

Everyone dies eventually. Life can be taken by anything, at any moment. Sometimes I remember when I died, the thoughts rushing through my head, the regrets and secrets… That piercing cold pain that moved from each finger tip to the rest of me still makes my breath stop and I feel like walking into the [...]

What do you think of this short story i wrote.?

Tell me the truth and feed back if you have any Slowly I turn the left knob of the sprawling white tub at my feet watching the water pour and my mother’s voice fade behind the thin plaster of the wall. My mouth exhales a short lived sigh of relief. Lifting a toe I submerge [...]

Does anyone mind to read a section of this story and tell me if it’s any good? ?

I woke with a start when I heard someone knocking on my front door. “Is someone there,” I asked groggily, rubbing my eyes and crawling out of bed. “It’s me, Nevaeh.” I ran to the door, now excited and less tired. I opened the door and found my friend, Brayden, standing there. He smiled as [...]

What do you think of my Fan-Fiction story?

I wrote this because i was bored but then i liked my idea so much and i thought to myself i shoudl should concider writing a novel about it. What so you all think of it? constructive criticisim appreciated thanks (oh and yes i realise the formatting and tabs are all messed up but that [...]

What do you think of my writing and story?

I don’t think I’m a very good writer, but here it is: Prologue Boom! Flash! Bang! Eight year old Alina Carmen suddenly woke up to the sound of thunder booming, lightning flashing, and someone knocking roughly on the hard wood door. Her mother, Celia, hurried into her room. “Alina, the wurgloes are here!” she whispered [...]

Could use some feedback/critique for story characters?

For about a month now I’ve been going to a ranch to take horse riding lessons. Anyway I thought about writing a story based on the everyday lives of some of the horses at the ranch and adding some of my original horse/farm animal characters to the mix. Here’s a few of the characters: Mika [...]

What do you think of my story, so far?

I started writing this story when I was 10. I’m eleven now and still writing it when I feel like it. I haven’t thought of a title or anything yet. I really want to publish a book one day, hopefully I can. Some parts might not make much sense because I have stopped writing some [...]

What do you think of this story?

Did it for L.A watcha think? CURTIS THE TURKEY Farmer Tom and his wife Matilda, both slowly walked around and around the turkey field, eyeing each plump creature. Tom gave out a deep laugh and turned to his wife. “Which one’s gonna be ours when that Thanksgivin’ comes? These ugly little rascals better hide if [...]

How is my story, I wrote it awhile ago and didn’t bother add more to it?

I was planning on writing at least 200 pages but I simply lost time for it, I only wrote about 6 single spaced pages. Well, tell me what you think, if you don’t mind reading it that is. Prologue- Deep within distant Mountains in the land of Illes’moria, lives an old man and his wife; [...]

Review this preface for my story plz…?

This is supposed a preface that gets you interested in the book, but makes no sense until after you’ve read the entire book. Tell me what you think. A scream shot out of my mouth and went through the entire house. There was a shadow of a person standing just outside my sliding glass door. [...]

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